Simplifying a sentence
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The logistics were those of a very large army, which indeed it was,
battalions of extras and theatrical performers for the biggest sound
set ever conceived.
Could someone simplify this sentence please?
meaning grammar
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The logistics were those of a very large army, which indeed it was,
battalions of extras and theatrical performers for the biggest sound
set ever conceived.
Could someone simplify this sentence please?
meaning grammar
edited yesterday
DJClayworth
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asked yesterday
HsnHsn
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Hi. I'm afraid we don't do proofreading, or do your language work for you. If you have a specific question about whether a specific simplification is valid we will be happy to answer a question about it.
– DJClayworth
yesterday
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Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived.
– John Lawler
yesterday
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The logistics were those of a very large army, which indeed it was,
battalions of extras and theatrical performers for the biggest sound
set ever conceived.
Could someone simplify this sentence please?
meaning grammar
edited yesterday
DJClayworth
11.5k12536
asked yesterday
HsnHsn
265
The logistics were those of a very large army, which indeed it was,
battalions of extras and theatrical performers for the biggest sound
set ever conceived.
Could someone simplify this sentence please?
meaning grammar
meaning grammar
edited yesterday
DJClayworth
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asked yesterday
HsnHsn
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edited yesterday
DJClayworth
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asked yesterday
HsnHsn
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edited yesterday
DJClayworth
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edited yesterday
DJClayworth
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edited yesterday
DJClayworth
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11.5k12536
asked yesterday
HsnHsn
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asked yesterday
HsnHsn
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asked yesterday
HsnHsn
265
265
Hi. I'm afraid we don't do proofreading, or do your language work for you. If you have a specific question about whether a specific simplification is valid we will be happy to answer a question about it.
– DJClayworth
yesterday
1
Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived.
– John Lawler
yesterday
add a comment |
Hi. I'm afraid we don't do proofreading, or do your language work for you. If you have a specific question about whether a specific simplification is valid we will be happy to answer a question about it.
– DJClayworth
yesterday
1
Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived.
– John Lawler
yesterday
Hi. I'm afraid we don't do proofreading, or do your language work for you. If you have a specific question about whether a specific simplification is valid we will be happy to answer a question about it.
– DJClayworth
yesterday
Hi. I'm afraid we don't do proofreading, or do your language work for you. If you have a specific question about whether a specific simplification is valid we will be happy to answer a question about it.
– DJClayworth
yesterday
1
1
Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived.
– John Lawler
yesterday
Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived.
– John Lawler
yesterday
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I would move the topic of the sentence up, and break it up into a separate sentence as well. You bury the lede after a convoluted introduction:
The sound set was the biggest ever conceived. Its logistics were like those of a very large army, which indeed it was, with battalions of extras and theatrical performers.
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CarlyCarly
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is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
yesterday
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
yesterday
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I would move the topic of the sentence up, and break it up into a separate sentence as well. You bury the lede after a convoluted introduction:
The sound set was the biggest ever conceived. Its logistics were like those of a very large army, which indeed it was, with battalions of extras and theatrical performers.
answered yesterday
CarlyCarly
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is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
yesterday
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
yesterday
add a comment |
I would move the topic of the sentence up, and break it up into a separate sentence as well. You bury the lede after a convoluted introduction:
The sound set was the biggest ever conceived. Its logistics were like those of a very large army, which indeed it was, with battalions of extras and theatrical performers.
answered yesterday
CarlyCarly
1,586213
is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
yesterday
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
yesterday
add a comment |
I would move the topic of the sentence up, and break it up into a separate sentence as well. You bury the lede after a convoluted introduction:
The sound set was the biggest ever conceived. Its logistics were like those of a very large army, which indeed it was, with battalions of extras and theatrical performers.
answered yesterday
CarlyCarly
1,586213
I would move the topic of the sentence up, and break it up into a separate sentence as well. You bury the lede after a convoluted introduction:
The sound set was the biggest ever conceived. Its logistics were like those of a very large army, which indeed it was, with battalions of extras and theatrical performers.
answered yesterday
CarlyCarly
1,586213
answered yesterday
CarlyCarly
1,586213
answered yesterday
CarlyCarly
1,586213
answered yesterday
CarlyCarly
1,586213
1,586213
is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
yesterday
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
yesterday
add a comment |
is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
yesterday
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
yesterday
is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
yesterday
is "with" connected to army? like men with umbrella,so its logistics were like those of theatrical performers and a very large amry with battalions of extras
– Hsn
yesterday
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
yesterday
battalion is used metaphorically. It refers to a military unit of command of several thousand people (specifics depend on nation/branch of military), here the author is saying there are so many performers, you could chunk them as a battalion
– Carly
yesterday
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Hi. I'm afraid we don't do proofreading, or do your language work for you. If you have a specific question about whether a specific simplification is valid we will be happy to answer a question about it.
– DJClayworth
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Break it up; that's too much for one sentence. E.g, The logistics were the logistics of a very large army. And it was indeed a very large army; it had battalions of extras and theatrical performers, all destined for the biggest sound set that was ever conceived.
– John Lawler
yesterday