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Under extreme marine environmental conditions, ocean creatures in their life can secrete some bioactive compounds made up of special structure.
The compounds could be extracted to marine natural products by researchers.
There are three biggest sources from marine natural products : 1) A, 2) B, and 3) C.
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Under extreme marine environmental conditions, ocean creatures in their life can secrete some bioactive compounds made up of special structure.
The compounds could be extracted to marine natural products by researchers.
There are three biggest sources from marine natural products : 1) A, 2) B, and 3) C.
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Under extreme marine environmental conditions, ocean creatures in their life can secrete some bioactive compounds made up of special structure.
The compounds could be extracted to marine natural products by researchers.
There are three biggest sources from marine natural products : 1) A, 2) B, and 3) C.
structure
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Under extreme marine environmental conditions, ocean creatures in their life can secrete some bioactive compounds made up of special structure.
The compounds could be extracted to marine natural products by researchers.
There are three biggest sources from marine natural products : 1) A, 2) B, and 3) C.
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You have three sentences here.
In the first I'd replace "their life" with "their lives", since more than one ocean creature is involved, and I'd replace "made up of special structure" with "with special structures", as I think it reads more naturally.
In the second sentence I'd replace "to" by "as"' because I'm assuming that the extracted compounds themselves are the natural products. [If the extracted compounds had to be processed, then they wouldn't be "natural marine products".]
In the last sentence, "principal sources" would read more naturally than "biggest sources". [I was going to suggest "main sources" but that would be an unintended pun, because 'main' can mean, as a noun, sea or ocean and, as an adjective, principal.]
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I would change "in their lives" to "throughout their lives" (if that is what is meant). The use of the word "special" is problematic. What is "special" about these structures? And should it be "extracted to create natural marine products"? Note, "natural marine" is more ... uhm, natural than the other way round. (Also, coming from a scientific background, I find the use of "natural" to describe products pretty meaningless. Even dishonest/offensive.) And I wouldn't use "researchers" to describe people producing products; they might develop the concept but not productise it.
– James Random
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Some better way to change structure of the sentences ? I mean sentence patterns.
– webkws
2 days ago
There's not much wrong with the sentence patterns, in my opinion.
– Philip Wood
2 days ago
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You have three sentences here.
In the first I'd replace "their life" with "their lives", since more than one ocean creature is involved, and I'd replace "made up of special structure" with "with special structures", as I think it reads more naturally.
In the second sentence I'd replace "to" by "as"' because I'm assuming that the extracted compounds themselves are the natural products. [If the extracted compounds had to be processed, then they wouldn't be "natural marine products".]
In the last sentence, "principal sources" would read more naturally than "biggest sources". [I was going to suggest "main sources" but that would be an unintended pun, because 'main' can mean, as a noun, sea or ocean and, as an adjective, principal.]
answered 2 days ago
Philip WoodPhilip Wood
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I would change "in their lives" to "throughout their lives" (if that is what is meant). The use of the word "special" is problematic. What is "special" about these structures? And should it be "extracted to create natural marine products"? Note, "natural marine" is more ... uhm, natural than the other way round. (Also, coming from a scientific background, I find the use of "natural" to describe products pretty meaningless. Even dishonest/offensive.) And I wouldn't use "researchers" to describe people producing products; they might develop the concept but not productise it.
– James Random
2 days ago
Some better way to change structure of the sentences ? I mean sentence patterns.
– webkws
2 days ago
There's not much wrong with the sentence patterns, in my opinion.
– Philip Wood
2 days ago
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You have three sentences here.
In the first I'd replace "their life" with "their lives", since more than one ocean creature is involved, and I'd replace "made up of special structure" with "with special structures", as I think it reads more naturally.
In the second sentence I'd replace "to" by "as"' because I'm assuming that the extracted compounds themselves are the natural products. [If the extracted compounds had to be processed, then they wouldn't be "natural marine products".]
In the last sentence, "principal sources" would read more naturally than "biggest sources". [I was going to suggest "main sources" but that would be an unintended pun, because 'main' can mean, as a noun, sea or ocean and, as an adjective, principal.]
answered 2 days ago
Philip WoodPhilip Wood
3256
I would change "in their lives" to "throughout their lives" (if that is what is meant). The use of the word "special" is problematic. What is "special" about these structures? And should it be "extracted to create natural marine products"? Note, "natural marine" is more ... uhm, natural than the other way round. (Also, coming from a scientific background, I find the use of "natural" to describe products pretty meaningless. Even dishonest/offensive.) And I wouldn't use "researchers" to describe people producing products; they might develop the concept but not productise it.
– James Random
2 days ago
Some better way to change structure of the sentences ? I mean sentence patterns.
– webkws
2 days ago
There's not much wrong with the sentence patterns, in my opinion.
– Philip Wood
2 days ago
add a comment |
You have three sentences here.
In the first I'd replace "their life" with "their lives", since more than one ocean creature is involved, and I'd replace "made up of special structure" with "with special structures", as I think it reads more naturally.
In the second sentence I'd replace "to" by "as"' because I'm assuming that the extracted compounds themselves are the natural products. [If the extracted compounds had to be processed, then they wouldn't be "natural marine products".]
In the last sentence, "principal sources" would read more naturally than "biggest sources". [I was going to suggest "main sources" but that would be an unintended pun, because 'main' can mean, as a noun, sea or ocean and, as an adjective, principal.]
answered 2 days ago
Philip WoodPhilip Wood
3256
You have three sentences here.
In the first I'd replace "their life" with "their lives", since more than one ocean creature is involved, and I'd replace "made up of special structure" with "with special structures", as I think it reads more naturally.
In the second sentence I'd replace "to" by "as"' because I'm assuming that the extracted compounds themselves are the natural products. [If the extracted compounds had to be processed, then they wouldn't be "natural marine products".]
In the last sentence, "principal sources" would read more naturally than "biggest sources". [I was going to suggest "main sources" but that would be an unintended pun, because 'main' can mean, as a noun, sea or ocean and, as an adjective, principal.]
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Philip WoodPhilip Wood
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Philip WoodPhilip Wood
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Philip WoodPhilip Wood
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Philip WoodPhilip Wood
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I would change "in their lives" to "throughout their lives" (if that is what is meant). The use of the word "special" is problematic. What is "special" about these structures? And should it be "extracted to create natural marine products"? Note, "natural marine" is more ... uhm, natural than the other way round. (Also, coming from a scientific background, I find the use of "natural" to describe products pretty meaningless. Even dishonest/offensive.) And I wouldn't use "researchers" to describe people producing products; they might develop the concept but not productise it.
– James Random
2 days ago
Some better way to change structure of the sentences ? I mean sentence patterns.
– webkws
2 days ago
There's not much wrong with the sentence patterns, in my opinion.
– Philip Wood
2 days ago
add a comment |
I would change "in their lives" to "throughout their lives" (if that is what is meant). The use of the word "special" is problematic. What is "special" about these structures? And should it be "extracted to create natural marine products"? Note, "natural marine" is more ... uhm, natural than the other way round. (Also, coming from a scientific background, I find the use of "natural" to describe products pretty meaningless. Even dishonest/offensive.) And I wouldn't use "researchers" to describe people producing products; they might develop the concept but not productise it.
– James Random
2 days ago
Some better way to change structure of the sentences ? I mean sentence patterns.
– webkws
2 days ago
There's not much wrong with the sentence patterns, in my opinion.
– Philip Wood
2 days ago
I would change "in their lives" to "throughout their lives" (if that is what is meant). The use of the word "special" is problematic. What is "special" about these structures? And should it be "extracted to create natural marine products"? Note, "natural marine" is more ... uhm, natural than the other way round. (Also, coming from a scientific background, I find the use of "natural" to describe products pretty meaningless. Even dishonest/offensive.) And I wouldn't use "researchers" to describe people producing products; they might develop the concept but not productise it.
– James Random
2 days ago
I would change "in their lives" to "throughout their lives" (if that is what is meant). The use of the word "special" is problematic. What is "special" about these structures? And should it be "extracted to create natural marine products"? Note, "natural marine" is more ... uhm, natural than the other way round. (Also, coming from a scientific background, I find the use of "natural" to describe products pretty meaningless. Even dishonest/offensive.) And I wouldn't use "researchers" to describe people producing products; they might develop the concept but not productise it.
– James Random
2 days ago
Some better way to change structure of the sentences ? I mean sentence patterns.
– webkws
2 days ago
Some better way to change structure of the sentences ? I mean sentence patterns.
– webkws
2 days ago
There's not much wrong with the sentence patterns, in my opinion.
– Philip Wood
2 days ago
There's not much wrong with the sentence patterns, in my opinion.
– Philip Wood
2 days ago
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