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Is it possible and good English to start a sentence with 'When reading...'?
Exactly it's about the following one:
When reading your offer it seemed to me as if this position is made for me.
bg,
Johannes
P.S.: If you have any other things to say about this sentence, I'm always open for corrections and tips.
grammar word-usage
asked Mar 6 '13 at 15:41
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Is it possible and good English to start a sentence with 'When reading...'?
Exactly it's about the following one:
When reading your offer it seemed to me as if this position is made for me.
bg,
Johannes
P.S.: If you have any other things to say about this sentence, I'm always open for corrections and tips.
grammar word-usage
asked Mar 6 '13 at 15:41
JohannesJohannes
88116
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It's not incorrect but it's not natural English. "When driving, pay attention to the road" is much better written as "Pay attention to the road when driving".
– user24964
Mar 6 '13 at 17:31
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And your sentence has many other problems. "It seemed to me" is flowery (who else would it seem to) and "as if" should be used for hypothetical situations and the passive "is made for me" is awkward too. In business English I'd write something like: "The position described in your offer seems ideal/perfect/tailor-made for me."
– user24964
Mar 6 '13 at 17:36
@TheMathemagician: thank you, I think I will change my sentence that way.
– Johannes
Mar 6 '13 at 21:57
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Is it possible and good English to start a sentence with 'When reading...'?
Exactly it's about the following one:
When reading your offer it seemed to me as if this position is made for me.
bg,
Johannes
P.S.: If you have any other things to say about this sentence, I'm always open for corrections and tips.
grammar word-usage
asked Mar 6 '13 at 15:41
JohannesJohannes
88116
Is it possible and good English to start a sentence with 'When reading...'?
Exactly it's about the following one:
When reading your offer it seemed to me as if this position is made for me.
bg,
Johannes
P.S.: If you have any other things to say about this sentence, I'm always open for corrections and tips.
grammar word-usage
grammar word-usage
asked Mar 6 '13 at 15:41
JohannesJohannes
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asked Mar 6 '13 at 15:41
JohannesJohannes
88116
asked Mar 6 '13 at 15:41
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asked Mar 6 '13 at 15:41
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asked Mar 6 '13 at 15:41
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It's not incorrect but it's not natural English. "When driving, pay attention to the road" is much better written as "Pay attention to the road when driving".
– user24964
Mar 6 '13 at 17:31
1
And your sentence has many other problems. "It seemed to me" is flowery (who else would it seem to) and "as if" should be used for hypothetical situations and the passive "is made for me" is awkward too. In business English I'd write something like: "The position described in your offer seems ideal/perfect/tailor-made for me."
– user24964
Mar 6 '13 at 17:36
@TheMathemagician: thank you, I think I will change my sentence that way.
– Johannes
Mar 6 '13 at 21:57
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It's not incorrect but it's not natural English. "When driving, pay attention to the road" is much better written as "Pay attention to the road when driving".
– user24964
Mar 6 '13 at 17:31
1
And your sentence has many other problems. "It seemed to me" is flowery (who else would it seem to) and "as if" should be used for hypothetical situations and the passive "is made for me" is awkward too. In business English I'd write something like: "The position described in your offer seems ideal/perfect/tailor-made for me."
– user24964
Mar 6 '13 at 17:36
@TheMathemagician: thank you, I think I will change my sentence that way.
– Johannes
Mar 6 '13 at 21:57
1
1
It's not incorrect but it's not natural English. "When driving, pay attention to the road" is much better written as "Pay attention to the road when driving".
– user24964
Mar 6 '13 at 17:31
It's not incorrect but it's not natural English. "When driving, pay attention to the road" is much better written as "Pay attention to the road when driving".
– user24964
Mar 6 '13 at 17:31
1
1
And your sentence has many other problems. "It seemed to me" is flowery (who else would it seem to) and "as if" should be used for hypothetical situations and the passive "is made for me" is awkward too. In business English I'd write something like: "The position described in your offer seems ideal/perfect/tailor-made for me."
– user24964
Mar 6 '13 at 17:36
And your sentence has many other problems. "It seemed to me" is flowery (who else would it seem to) and "as if" should be used for hypothetical situations and the passive "is made for me" is awkward too. In business English I'd write something like: "The position described in your offer seems ideal/perfect/tailor-made for me."
– user24964
Mar 6 '13 at 17:36
@TheMathemagician: thank you, I think I will change my sentence that way.
– Johannes
Mar 6 '13 at 21:57
@TheMathemagician: thank you, I think I will change my sentence that way.
– Johannes
Mar 6 '13 at 21:57
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It does sound a little funny. Something more along these lines might be better:
- While I was reading your offer, it seemed as though this position were made for me.
- As I was reading your offer, it seemed like this position had been made for me.
- As I read your offer, it occurred to me that this position seemed made for me.
answered Mar 6 '13 at 16:01
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That sentence, “When reading your offer it seemed to me as if this position is made for me”, is afflicted with a mild case of dangling modifier. The notion is that applying the modifier “When reading your offer” to the subject of the sentence (it) doesn't make sense. (Note, it is a dummy pronoun in the sentence.) The rewordings given previously avoid the problem. The wikipedia article suggests that opinions differ on the importance of avoiding dangling modifiers.
answered Mar 6 '13 at 16:17
James Waldby - jwpat7James Waldby - jwpat7
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I would go with:
"Your offer makes clear that this position is for me."
The word "seemed" is stylistically week.
answered Jan 24 '14 at 23:03
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It does sound a little funny. Something more along these lines might be better:
- While I was reading your offer, it seemed as though this position were made for me.
- As I was reading your offer, it seemed like this position had been made for me.
- As I read your offer, it occurred to me that this position seemed made for me.
answered Mar 6 '13 at 16:01
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It does sound a little funny. Something more along these lines might be better:
- While I was reading your offer, it seemed as though this position were made for me.
- As I was reading your offer, it seemed like this position had been made for me.
- As I read your offer, it occurred to me that this position seemed made for me.
answered Mar 6 '13 at 16:01
tchrist♦tchrist
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It does sound a little funny. Something more along these lines might be better:
- While I was reading your offer, it seemed as though this position were made for me.
- As I was reading your offer, it seemed like this position had been made for me.
- As I read your offer, it occurred to me that this position seemed made for me.
answered Mar 6 '13 at 16:01
tchrist♦tchrist
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It does sound a little funny. Something more along these lines might be better:
- While I was reading your offer, it seemed as though this position were made for me.
- As I was reading your offer, it seemed like this position had been made for me.
- As I read your offer, it occurred to me that this position seemed made for me.
answered Mar 6 '13 at 16:01
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answered Mar 6 '13 at 16:01
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That sentence, “When reading your offer it seemed to me as if this position is made for me”, is afflicted with a mild case of dangling modifier. The notion is that applying the modifier “When reading your offer” to the subject of the sentence (it) doesn't make sense. (Note, it is a dummy pronoun in the sentence.) The rewordings given previously avoid the problem. The wikipedia article suggests that opinions differ on the importance of avoiding dangling modifiers.
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James Waldby - jwpat7James Waldby - jwpat7
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That sentence, “When reading your offer it seemed to me as if this position is made for me”, is afflicted with a mild case of dangling modifier. The notion is that applying the modifier “When reading your offer” to the subject of the sentence (it) doesn't make sense. (Note, it is a dummy pronoun in the sentence.) The rewordings given previously avoid the problem. The wikipedia article suggests that opinions differ on the importance of avoiding dangling modifiers.
answered Mar 6 '13 at 16:17
James Waldby - jwpat7James Waldby - jwpat7
62.6k1189183
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That sentence, “When reading your offer it seemed to me as if this position is made for me”, is afflicted with a mild case of dangling modifier. The notion is that applying the modifier “When reading your offer” to the subject of the sentence (it) doesn't make sense. (Note, it is a dummy pronoun in the sentence.) The rewordings given previously avoid the problem. The wikipedia article suggests that opinions differ on the importance of avoiding dangling modifiers.
answered Mar 6 '13 at 16:17
James Waldby - jwpat7James Waldby - jwpat7
62.6k1189183
That sentence, “When reading your offer it seemed to me as if this position is made for me”, is afflicted with a mild case of dangling modifier. The notion is that applying the modifier “When reading your offer” to the subject of the sentence (it) doesn't make sense. (Note, it is a dummy pronoun in the sentence.) The rewordings given previously avoid the problem. The wikipedia article suggests that opinions differ on the importance of avoiding dangling modifiers.
answered Mar 6 '13 at 16:17
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answered Mar 6 '13 at 16:17
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I would go with:
"Your offer makes clear that this position is for me."
The word "seemed" is stylistically week.
answered Jan 24 '14 at 23:03
James KingsberyJames Kingsbery
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I would go with:
"Your offer makes clear that this position is for me."
The word "seemed" is stylistically week.
answered Jan 24 '14 at 23:03
James KingsberyJames Kingsbery
43327
add a comment |
I would go with:
"Your offer makes clear that this position is for me."
The word "seemed" is stylistically week.
answered Jan 24 '14 at 23:03
James KingsberyJames Kingsbery
43327
I would go with:
"Your offer makes clear that this position is for me."
The word "seemed" is stylistically week.
answered Jan 24 '14 at 23:03
James KingsberyJames Kingsbery
43327
answered Jan 24 '14 at 23:03
James KingsberyJames Kingsbery
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answered Jan 24 '14 at 23:03
James KingsberyJames Kingsbery
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answered Jan 24 '14 at 23:03
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It's not incorrect but it's not natural English. "When driving, pay attention to the road" is much better written as "Pay attention to the road when driving".
– user24964
Mar 6 '13 at 17:31
1
And your sentence has many other problems. "It seemed to me" is flowery (who else would it seem to) and "as if" should be used for hypothetical situations and the passive "is made for me" is awkward too. In business English I'd write something like: "The position described in your offer seems ideal/perfect/tailor-made for me."
– user24964
Mar 6 '13 at 17:36
@TheMathemagician: thank you, I think I will change my sentence that way.
– Johannes
Mar 6 '13 at 21:57